Es So Scawy

this is the drinking game pasta from my latest journal. 85 drinks and I hurt.

So now to the stamp and what makes it so shitty. For the most obvious point it was moved to trollpasta.com for having so many cliches. 

My personal reasons now which is the reason other people don't like it.

1: no build up. He sitting playing sonic unleashed and then he gets the game looks normal then everything goes to shit.
2: his friend's letter. "It was my friend kyle's handwriting but it looked different" this makes no fucking sense.
3: game mixing. when you write a creepypasta of a game you should only use elements of the game. he had sonic 3, sonic adventure 2 final fantasy 6, silent hill, earthbound, and sonic cd. okay using other sonic games is a little more believable than than having other franchises! no wait even the sonic things don't make sense since this is the first sonic game they shouldn't even be in there!
4: seeing the emotions of the characters. it's an 8-bit game. how the hell would you see emotion in it? why would they show emotion? in fact you seeing the emotion in the character kills some of the mood.
5: the great details in the tiny animals. it's one thing to see emotions in the characters but you can into detail about tiny ass spirits? no
6: timing. he has the exact time of every little scene? did you have a stopwatch with you? did you start counting every time something happened.
7: blood blood and more blood. blood if used correctly is good but the amount in the game is hilariously bad!
8: the starting screen. if it was a split second you shouldn't have been able to see everything in detail on the screen change. I've watched the roms of this pasta and I couldn't detail everything with that time so how could you? magic?
9: Hyper-realism. Hyper-realism is a term used for art when you can't tell reality from art but in the context the writer used it was wrong! he also used it to much in one bit of time which kills any effect that would have made this 'scary'
10:  EFFECTING THE REAL WORLD!! this is my biggest peeve in pastas and it made your friend insane, made you have a nightmare, and made a doll appear behind you. It's a game if anything a headache would have been okay because you could say the music hurt your head.
11: more like a recolor. I get they wanted to make him look scary (which it isn't) but black eyes red puplis. not interesting and rather boring. more like a zalgo thing. (I don't know which one was written first) but it does nothing to make it scarier for me.
12: grammar. I know I make mistakes too everyone does every know and again. his however is not knowing the right tense. when I write I used the wrong form (ex effect and affect) but is the line

If you like it whatever but please at least re-read it and think about the points I make. then maybe at least you'll see why people dislike it and why it was moved.

There is a reason Ben is better than this. no blood and just uses things from what are already in the game. the ocarina of time part is kay because it's short and majora mask and time share the same drive so it is more believable